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For dreary days I wait for sleep,
In that heat lone friends are mine:
A pot of tea, a glass of wine.
Some days I can’t help but sink deep,
Mute allies float me through those times,
For dreary days I wait for sleep,
A pot of tea, a glass of wine.
My hands are closed but cannot keep
Happy thoughts; I’m lost, unkind,
Shaken, stupid, and resigned;
For dreary days I wait for sleep,
In that heat lone friends are mine:
A pot of tea, a glass of wine.
In that heat lone friends are mine:
A pot of tea, a glass of wine.
Some days I can’t help but sink deep,
Mute allies float me through those times,
For dreary days I wait for sleep,
A pot of tea, a glass of wine.
My hands are closed but cannot keep
Happy thoughts; I’m lost, unkind,
Shaken, stupid, and resigned;
For dreary days I wait for sleep,
In that heat lone friends are mine:
A pot of tea, a glass of wine.
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I like the subject matter of this one! The first and third refrains are well chosen, but I feel like that second refrain "In that heat lone friends are mine" seems like a bit of an awkward construction. The line's passive voice detract from the forcefulness of the statement, and it seems odd to say "lone friends" in the plural, even though they of course are referring to the tea and wine.
Overall, though, I enjoyed the strong meter and good composition in this piece!
Overall, though, I enjoyed the strong meter and good composition in this piece!